Thursday, March 11, 2010

Jordan Uses Word Groups To Describe The Beach

On a hot sunny day the people were jumping over
the rolling waves and the people were sunbathing.
The dog was leaping for the frisbee.

4 comments:

Miss Burne said...

Well done Jordon, you have painted a picture of the beach with your words!
I can see the people sunbathing and the dog leaping in my mind.

Your next step when writing is to see if you can write one or two more sentences. I would love to read more of your ideas.

mum said...

good one jordan

love mum

kym said...

Jordan,
I am a student at the University of South Alabama in Dr. Strange's EDM 310 and I was told to comment on your class blog.This is a great description of the beach. This description makes me long for summer days at the beach. Great job. You can see my comments about the blog at http//mcnortonkedm310.com
Thanks,
Kimberly McNorton

Vivienne said...

Hi Jordan,
That was a great description of the beach. I like the way you used good vocab(words). Keep up the great work in class.
Vivienne